Wherever you are, I will be standing
Even when everybody is laughing
Your greatness is all I wanted to see
Upon the heavens and the lonely sea
When you breathe failure, I will eat despair
If sadness is suffocating, I'll give air
I will clear paths, move mountains for your sake
Burden I will carry, years it may take
But yesterday that was, now I am weak
An old man, Too wise with an aching back
Wanderer you, now a successful man
With golden hat, treasures and so much land
Fog and mist of triumphs made your eyes blind
You no longer see, a friend you left behind
"A sonnet: first attempt
ReplyDeleteLeniency I seek." I think i should start putting disclaimers after my own poems :)
Thanks Jessie, that's the nastiest yet the nicest comment so far about my works.
ReplyDeleteI posted some detailed comments today about your sonnet's meter onto the Poets group, where you posted a copy. I'm leaving this message so you won't miss them.
ReplyDeleteThanks Sir George. I really appreciate it and by the way I like the "dwarf under the bed."
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