The Girl with a Broken Heart


Just yesterday you were so happy
Waved your hand, said hello to me
Heard you giggling with your friends
You were so pretty dressed in green

This morning, I waved and said hi
You’ve looked at me with those teary eyes
A letter in your hand drenched in tears
I wanted to hold you and tell you I care

In the evening you were on the porch
Staring, lonely sitting on the couch
As if you are waiting for that familiar car
But no one, nothing came until you retire

Next morning you’re nowhere to be found
I’ve looked for you, drove my car around
There you were standing on the beach
The other side you are trying to reach

I've seen enough, I couldn't just watch
Parked the car, unlocked the belt's latch
Ran as fast as I could, hugged you from behind
Slowly kneeling, both of us crying on the sand


17 Responses to "The Girl with a Broken Heart"

  1. This tugged at my heart, very deeply.

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  2. Ronald,
    A very emotional story unfolding.
    A realistic life situation.

    Best,

    Eileen

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  3. hhh brokent heart always made us sad n crying...

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  4. ...it portrays a typical love story with a not so happy ending... the anthology of emotions and the manner of narration made this poem truly appealing... i simply loved it!:)

    Take care!

    >kelvin

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  5. Thank you guys, just make the ending happier, or probably I should make it on the next post.

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  6. Anonymous15:50

    I love how the emotions are so intense here.

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  7. i like this poem very visual check out my poems on love www.gabriellamattis.blogspot.com

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  8. Glad to see you at potluck..
    lovely descriptions on emotions and more.

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  9. The moments unspoken of a newly broken heart, til 'both of us cryong on the sand'... the total embrace of the truest of friends.

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  10. Anonymous06:21

    love thie images you painted.. nice!

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  11. Thanks for linking up with potluck..

    your image demonstrated the broken heart girl beautifully.

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  12. Dear Mallari
    Sweet and simple.. I liked this one.. thanks

    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    Twitter: @VerseEveryDay
    Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com

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  13. Anonymous19:58

    great poem. good use of language and imagery. nice job!

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  14. thanks for linking up with potluck.

    http://jingleyanqiu.wordpress.com/2010/11/16/moods-are-like-dark-woods-4-potluck-week-10/

    award/treats for you. smiles.

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  15. I enjoyed the way you built suspense throughout the poem to climax at the end. This is a very emotional poem.

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  16. geetha09:43

    very touching

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  17. Poignant. So great to see your words flowing and inspiring. Best to you for 2013

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